1st image: antena of car moving along barren landscape with bits of snow flying in the air
2nd image: Car plowing through snow
3rd image: car pulls up to house
4th: gets out of car
5th (not shown): black screen and a thud
6th image: camera pulls out a bit and the guy stands up in the doorway leaving the box
Awesome! The 4th image is slightly confusing for me. Maybe instead of seeing the feet and just a tire, we see more of the truck steps and a bit more of the guy's legs.
ReplyDeleteAlso between images 2&3 maybe an additional one with just some more of the snow wiped away so we can tell it's a car- and maybe adding another scene where we see the whole car and can tell that it is a vehicle.
The 5th image is a little bit menacing - I think since the delivery guy is a minor character, the focus should be on the package instead. Since we also haven't seen him holding the package beforehand, we don't understand that it is a package being delivered. We also need a few shots in between 4&5 showing him at the door and opening the door, since the viewer might get lost between the two shots.
i actually like that it's a bit menacing. i think it adds suspense because then when you see the box he's carrying, you're REALLY gonna wonder what's in it.
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